hello.
id like to ask what yall have thought about my last 5(?) lore posts. are they good? bad? what can i do better? etc
mostly doing this to enhance my creative writing skills and flow of ideas.
plus, it's been a bit since ive actually talked to y'all as a whole so i thought it'd be nice to get back in touch some way, somehow.
if you have any topics or ideas or whatever just put them down, i can try and build something off of it.
bye.
(ngl im probably gonna regret this)
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love me some lore former hgm, npu dvl (sentry), lvet co
Critiques:
Often too much exposition and world building. Cut it down to what's necessary to the story. Opening your story like the original Star Wars movie is boring. Remember, you're writing in a universe with an already well fleshed out world.
And if you can: show don't tell. Meaning, it's better to show something that just out right stating it. It's better to let the reader infer it for themselves. Let me give you an example.
Bad: I stepped into Jake's room. He always had a fascination for space.
Better: I stepped into Jake's room. I found him admiring the night sky with his telescope pointed out the window.
Writing prompt:
Let's say a town (maybe Ravenholm) gets head crab mortared. A rebel and a combine (maybe left behind in a raid gone wrong or just captured) who must work together to survive. (gay sex ensues). Will their tactics clash? Will they come to see each other differently? Will they bicker like a 50-year-old couple? If backs are stabbed, is betrayal or just war?
Having the only conflict between them be "you from other side me hate" I'd imagine would be a bit stale. Maybe the combine killed the rebs gf or the reb killed the combine's squad mates or some shit.
id like to ask what yall have thought about my last 5(?) lore posts. are they good? bad? what can i do better? etc
mostly doing this to enhance my creative writing skills and flow of ideas.
plus, it's been a bit since ive actually talked to y'all as a whole so i thought it'd be nice to get back in touch some way, somehow.
if you have any topics or ideas or whatever just put them down, i can try and build something off of it.
bye.
(ngl im probably gonna regret this)
former hgm, npu dvl (sentry), lvet co
I like the occasional and completely random schizoposts that talk about cool stuff.
Ancient GRID CmD, prior SU Major/GB COL.
Credit to SEVIN.
thanks unc
will take that into account as i bludgeon you to death
(why the fuck is my name robert)
Current Major General
Often too much exposition and world building. Cut it down to what's necessary to the story. Opening your story like the original Star Wars movie is boring. Remember, you're writing in a universe with an already well fleshed out world.
And if you can: show don't tell. Meaning, it's better to show something that just out right stating it. It's better to let the reader infer it for themselves. Let me give you an example.
Bad: I stepped into Jake's room. He always had a fascination for space.
Better: I stepped into Jake's room. I found him admiring the night sky with his telescope pointed out the window.
Writing prompt:
Let's say a town (maybe Ravenholm) gets head crab mortared. A rebel and a combine (maybe left behind in a raid gone wrong or just captured) who must work together to survive. (gay sex ensues). Will their tactics clash? Will they come to see each other differently? Will they bicker like a 50-year-old couple? If backs are stabbed, is betrayal or just war?
Having the only conflict between them be "you from other side me hate" I'd imagine would be a bit stale. Maybe the combine killed the rebs gf or the reb killed the combine's squad mates or some shit.