Lambda Rebellion, February 25th, 202-

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2 KA-52 helicopters blaze over the landscape, their rotors slicing the air as they move. Mint-green noses displace the air as the flat, bluish-gray hulls streak across the sky, leaving the land in its wake. They're nicknamed "Alligators" by the MPF and Rebellion due to their shape and length resembling the now extinct species. They sneak behind enemy lines in a do-and-die attack on artillery batteries pounding allied lines. Prior recon by Scavenger and Spectre Unit foot soldiers reported light, if any, anti-air installations past a certain point near the former city of Chisinau. Their path diverges south from the main front and barrels north-north-east, straight through the Combine supply lines. 
20 years earlier, these soldiers would not be here. They would be in school. They wouldn’t be running for their lives as they did during that fateful May day. They wouldn’t be struggling to survive as an oppressive alien force steamrolls over Earth in 7 hours. They wouldn’t have even thought to be pilots, let alone allies, in a world so cruelly stolen from them. 
Now, these soldiers take control of the flying metal beasts, and they seek revenge.
Firebird 2’s pilots see long, slender dots firing blue streaks into the air in slow succession. They radio in the sighting. 
“Contact sighted 5 klicks to the northeast, acknowledge Firebird One.”
“Firebird One acknowledges, priming weapons to engage. Copy, Firebird Two.”
“Priming weapons.”
Firebird One and Two’s pilots press a little green button on their dashboard, and the four tubes on the helicopter's wings open, revealing 20 hydra hellfire missiles each. 80 equipped on each craft. These craft pack white-phosphorus and generic explosive missiles in their batteries, portioned evenly.
The helicopters raise speed and begin barreling towards the artillery batteries. If they’re careful, they could be evacing out of here in 10 minutes, back to friendly territory, rendering this mission null of any suicide requirement.
Though it isn't mandatory, giving your life in exchange for taking many, many others, is in the mind of Resistance troops. They've taken on a role similar to Japanese suicide pilots during WWII, yet their stakes are greater. An empire isn't at stake, but the war effort, and control of their home.
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On the ground, five transhuman soldiers surround an Overwatch Precision Oriented Artillery System, or OPOAS, with one piloting it. They watch as the weapon charges up its batteries, and fires blindly into the sky. Their enemies hopefully dead on the other end, and their lines weaker. 6 other groups do the same, and a separate group in the back mans an AA battery. The only one on the makeshift compound.
Their radios beep on and they’re forced to listen.
“<::AERIAL CONTACT SIGHTED TO THE SOUTH AND ADVANCING AT A RAPID RATE, ALL UNITS BE ADVISED WE HAVE ENEMY HELOS ON OUR SIX. DO COMMANDERS READ?::>”
“<::READ.::>”
“<::READ.::>”
The AA battery swivels towards the helicopters.
“<::ENGAGE ORDER REQUEST, FRIENDLY OR HOSTILE.::>
<::HOSTILE, ORDER GRANTED.::>
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Firebird One and Two are ready to strike. The nose of the craft dips down, the pilots have their hands over the fire button and-
Firebird Two is engulfed in flames, as a pulse AA battery shreds through the carapace with effortless efficiency. 
“FIREBIRD TWO DOWN.”
Firebird One presses the button, and every hellfire missile from every tube, one at a time, begins to scream towards the ground. The heli rises up, nose going upwards towards the last battery as the missiles form a fiery red cloud on every artillery station. 
The heli, however, explodes into a fireball, with the last of its missiles blowing up in the tube. Defective.
Firebird One and Two disappear on the radar maps, as do the artillery stations.
The Combine’s response is swift and brutal. A garrison of OSS airdrops into the front lines and brutally assaults the Lambda soldiers stationed. The OSS aren’t called back until 2 hours and 30 miles of setback have been dished out. 
The Rebellion, however, bounces back…

-Kenny McCormick

The font is uncomfortable to read. There are some punctuation errors with commas and parentheses. Otherwise, pretty good.

(9 Jul 22 at 1:31am)Sevin Wrote: The font is uncomfortable to read. There are some punctuation errors with commas and parentheses. Otherwise, pretty good.

elaborate

New Times Roman puts a lot of extra details and complexities into each letter. This can make it difficult to read a lot of, especially when it's all italicized.
In my opinion plain Arial would be better.

There are a few unnecessary commas; most often they show up before the word "and", but they are in other places.

As for the parentheses, I'm referring to sentence:
“Firebird One acknowledges, priming weapons to engage. Copy, Firebird Two.”
I think you meant to write it like this:
Firebird One acknowledges, priming weapons to engage, "Copy, Firebird Two.”

Also, this:
“FIREBIRD TWO DOWN.”
Could use an exclamation mark.

(11 Jul 22 at 1:32am)Sevin Wrote: New Times Roman puts a lot of extra details and complexities into each letter. This can make it difficult to read a lot of, especially when it's all italicized.
In my opinion plain Arial would be better.

There are a few unnecessary commas; most often they show up before the word "and", but they are in other places.

As for the parentheses, I'm referring to sentence:
“Firebird One acknowledges, priming weapons to engage. Copy, Firebird Two.”
I think you meant to write it like this:
Firebird One acknowledges, priming weapons to engage, "Copy, Firebird Two.”

Also, this:
“FIREBIRD TWO DOWN.”
Could use an exclamation mark.

first thing is a spoken action, mainly used to relay to the other end what you're doing in case they have to do something complimantary. Ex. "Reloading howitzer, weapon ready to engage, awaiting strike coordinates."

second, that's a calm reaction. The pilot knows their lives are at stake so they accept whatever happens and keep moving with the mission. They know panicked actions and reactions will compromise the mission.

editing commas lol

like the car?

(1 Aug 22 at 4:16pm)Kenny McCormick Wrote:

(11 Jul 22 at 1:32am)Sevin Wrote: New Times Roman puts a lot of extra details and complexities into each letter. This can make it difficult to read a lot of, especially when it's all italicized.
In my opinion plain Arial would be better.

There are a few unnecessary commas; most often they show up before the word "and", but they are in other places.

As for the parentheses, I'm referring to sentence:
“Firebird One acknowledges, priming weapons to engage. Copy, Firebird Two.”
I think you meant to write it like this:
Firebird One acknowledges, priming weapons to engage, "Copy, Firebird Two.”

Also, this:
“FIREBIRD TWO DOWN.”
Could use an exclamation mark.

first thing is a spoken action, mainly used to relay to the other end what you're doing in case they have to do something complimantary. Ex. "Reloading howitzer, weapon ready to engage, awaiting strike coordinates."

second, that's a calm reaction. The pilot knows their lives are at stake so they accept whatever happens and keep moving with the mission. They know panicked actions and reactions will compromise the mission.

editing commas lol

It's just weird that he acknowledges Firebird Two's message twice and that he speaks in the third person when acknowledges the first time.

The all caps imply shouting. Thats what confused me.